HOMEWORK & Correction please
학생이 쓴 원문
Homework->My most enjoyable time to study English is making a friend. I can share my idea and exchange information.
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After the meaningful meeting with Mr.Hans-Horst Konkolewsky, Korea Workers Compensation & Welfare Service (COMWEL) president Lee Jae-Kap would like to visit your organization on a Europe tour. The provisional schedule will be 19 November and we would like to request for the acceptance of our visit.
International Social Security Association (ISSA) is the leading institution in conveying social security and advanced expertise to the world.
The objectives of the visit are geared towards addressing the following challenges:
1Extension of coverage to vulnerable groups by the changing employment
2.Improving the fair judgment for the recognition of occupational disease
3.To Activate Return to work program
Our delegation would like to discuss these faced problems with your organization. We shall appreciate to learn your various experiences and advance practices.
강사 첨삭
Hi Miss [이름]!
I\'m very sorry that I wasn\'t able to come to class yesterday...
But anyways, I\'ll be able to see you later in class! :))
CORRECTIONS:
Homework->My most enjoyable time to study English is making a friend. I can share my idea and exchange information.
>>>My most enjoyable time to study English is to make a friend. I can share my ideas and exchange information
After the meaningful meeting with Mr.Hans-Horst Konkolewsky, Korea Workers Compensation & Welfare Service (COMWEL) president Lee Jae-Kap would like to visit your organization on a Europe tour.
>>CORRECT
BETTER>> ...president, Lee Jae-Kap... (put comma)
The provisional schedule will be 19 November and we would like to request for the acceptance of our visit.
>>The provisional schedule will be on 19 November, and we would like to request for the acceptance of our visit.
International Social Security Association (ISSA) is the leading institution in conveying social security and advanced expertise to the world.
>>CORRECT
The objectives of the visit are geared towards addressing the following challenges:
>>CORRECT
1Extension of coverage to vulnerable groups by the changing employment
>>CORRECT
BETTER>> ...changing employment status.
2.Improving the fair judgment for the recognition of occupational disease
>>CORRECT
BETTER>> ...diseases.
3.To Activate Return to work program
>>CORRECT
Our delegation would like to discuss these faced problems with your organization. We shall appreciate to learn your various experiences and advance practices.
>>Our delegation would like to discuss these faced problems with your organization. We shall appreciate to learn your various experiences and advanced practices.
I\'m very sorry that I wasn\'t able to come to class yesterday...
But anyways, I\'ll be able to see you later in class! :))
CORRECTIONS:
Homework->My most enjoyable time to study English is making a friend. I can share my idea and exchange information.
>>>My most enjoyable time to study English is to make a friend. I can share my ideas and exchange information
After the meaningful meeting with Mr.Hans-Horst Konkolewsky, Korea Workers Compensation & Welfare Service (COMWEL) president Lee Jae-Kap would like to visit your organization on a Europe tour.
>>CORRECT
BETTER>> ...president, Lee Jae-Kap... (put comma)
The provisional schedule will be 19 November and we would like to request for the acceptance of our visit.
>>The provisional schedule will be on 19 November, and we would like to request for the acceptance of our visit.
International Social Security Association (ISSA) is the leading institution in conveying social security and advanced expertise to the world.
>>CORRECT
The objectives of the visit are geared towards addressing the following challenges:
>>CORRECT
1Extension of coverage to vulnerable groups by the changing employment
>>CORRECT
BETTER>> ...changing employment status.
2.Improving the fair judgment for the recognition of occupational disease
>>CORRECT
BETTER>> ...diseases.
3.To Activate Return to work program
>>CORRECT
Our delegation would like to discuss these faced problems with your organization. We shall appreciate to learn your various experiences and advance practices.
>>Our delegation would like to discuss these faced problems with your organization. We shall appreciate to learn your various experiences and advanced practices.
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