homework D 2/1

2018-02-05 · 첨삭 강사 Don

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If you were given the chance to live in a different country, which country would you want to live? Actually I didn't have a idea of abroad life because I have a plan to go to my countryside with my family during my elder period I was born in jeju island located southern area of korea and still lived my mother It is a really beautiful island that have originally various natural environments so I grew having tendency to like purely nature If I have a chance to live in a different country, I will choose the county that have a natural surroundings Like Newzeland I had a few knowledge about Newzeland, but exectly there is pure nature so I hope to go there as soon as possible. However. firstly, I have to study hard english for near future.

강사 첨삭

HI JI!!


How did you spend your weekend? I will see you soon in my class.


T. DON


If you were given the chance to live in a different country, which country would you want to live?

Actually I didn\'t have a idea of abroad life because I have a plan to go to my countryside with my family during my elder period

>> Actually, I didn\'t have any idea about life in abroad because I have a plan to settle down in a country side with my family when I\'m old.

 I was born in jeju island located southern area of korea and still lived my mother

>> I was born in Jeju Island located in the Southern area of Korea where my mother still lives up to this day.

 It is a really beautiful island that have originally various natural environments so I grew having tendency to like purely nature

>> I grew up in a place where a beautiful island has various natural resources. 

 

If I have a chance to live in a different country, I will choose the county that have a natural surroundings Like Newzeland.

>>  If I have a chance to live in a different country, I will choose the county that has natural surroundings Like New Zealand.

 I had a few knowledge about Newzeland, but exectly there is pure nature

>>  I have a few knowledge about New Zealand but the best thing about the country is the beautiful nature.


 so I hope to go there as soon as possible.

>> CORRECT

 However. firstly, I have to study hard english for near future.

>> However, I have to study English very hard for my future.


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