Homework-Day05

2019-06-20 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

학생이 쓴 원문

How do you see yourself ten years from now? After 10 years, I get a job at Disney which I really want to go to. In Disney, I make and create some effects for Disney animation such as Frozen, Lion King and Little Mermaid. Every my coworkers are so familiar and kind, so we have a very good relationship. I don\'t get married yet, but have a boyfriend who is not only so handsome but nice to me. Whenever I have a break from work, I go back to Korea to meet my family and friends. Sometimes, we travel other countries to enjoy our life.

강사 첨삭

Hi Jenna! ^ ^ Thank you for taking the time and sharing your thoughts in this homework. I appreciate it a lot! ^ ^
I hope you will achieve your dreams and aspirations. You have such a wonderful dream! ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah 

After 10 years, I get a job at Disney which I really want to go to. 
>>Ten years from now, I see myself working at Disney which is what I really want to do.
In Disney, I make and create some effects for Disney animation such as Frozen, Lion King and Little Mermaid. 
>>CORRECT
Every my coworkers are so familiar and kind, so we have a very good relationship. 
>>I am familiar with each of my co workers and they are so kind, so we have a very good relationship.
I don\'t get married yet, but have a boyfriend who is not only so handsome but nice to me. 
>>I am not married yet, but, I have a boyfriend who is not only so handsome but also nice to me.
Whenever I have a break from work, I go back to Korea to meet my family and friends. 
>>CORRECT
Sometimes, we travel other countries to enjoy our life.
>>Sometimes, we travel to other countries and just enjoy life.

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