Homework-Day06
학생이 쓴 원문
-Some people fail in school, but end up being successful in life. Why do you think this is the case?
What is the most important thing to succeed in life?
The representative example of people is probably Bill Gates. He took off the school in the middle but became the richest person in the World. Being stuck in a certain situation like going to school, doing assignments is the hardest part. Therefore, many students want to quit their school life. However, there are two different cases happened: some students just failed to study and find their goal. They regret their behavior after all. On the other hand, others succeed even without any director or teacher who can lead them to the right road. Then what is the difference between them? I think a passion and specific plan would be. The last group who succeed had all certain plans and a clear goal, and then they try to follow their purpose. Even when they don\'t feel good or not in the mood of studying, they keep doing their plans.
강사 첨삭
Hi Jenna! ^ ^ Thank you for the taking time in doing your homework. I appreciate it a lot! ^ ^
Good point on this one. We must have a goal and be motivated in achieving it. I guess it doesn\'t matter whether you are a drop out, an undergraduate as long as your goals are specific and you are focused in obtaining that goal! ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
The representative example of people is probably Bill Gates.
>>The best example for this situation is Bill Gates.
He took off the school in the middle but became the richest person in the World.
>>He dropped out of school but became one of the richest man in the world.
Being stuck in a certain situation like going to school, doing assignments is the hardest part.
>>CORRECT
Therefore, many students want to quit their school life.
>>CORRECT
However, there are two different cases happened: some students just failed to study and find their goal.
>>However, there are two different cases that happened: some students just failed to study and were not able to achieve their goal.
They regret their behavior after all.
>>CORRECT
On the other hand, others succeed even without any director or teacher who can lead them to the right road.
>>CORRECT
Then what is the difference between them?
>>CORRECT
I think a passion and specific plan would be.
>>I think having a specific plan and passion makes a big difference.
The last group who succeed had all certain plans and a clear goal, and then they try to follow their purpose.
>>The last group who succeeded had certain plans and clear goals, and then they try to follow their purpose.
Even when they don\'t feel good or not in the mood of studying, they keep doing their plans.
>>CORRECT
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