Homework_Day1 (Q. Do you think greetings can influence the outcome of a conversation?)
학생이 쓴 원문
I think Greeting people impacts to relationship after the situation.
Because I have the experiences of gaps about difference about relationships between the situation I greeted the person who I have seen first and I didn’t.
People think someone would have positive feeling for them when they see the person who greeting them with kindly smile.
Sometimes, People think someone would negative feeling for them when they see the person who don’t greet them because of their two-way thinking.
In the later case, I have the experience that after the situation people do not talk with each other.
In this case, It’s very hard to get the better relationship with the effort of one person because of the influence of their thinking.
So, I think It’s important to greet the person who I saw first to get the good relationship and talk with each other friendly.
Thank you for reviewing :)
강사 첨삭
Thank you for this Stella!
I think Greeting people impacts to relationship after the situation.
>>> I think greeting people has an impacts in the relationship after the situation.
Because I have the experiences of gaps about difference about relationships between the situation I greeted the person who I have seen first and I didn’t.
>>> Because I have experiences on the gaps or difference in the relationships between the situation I greeted the person who I have seen first and those I am already familiar with.
People think someone would have positive feeling for them when they see the person who greeting them with kindly smile.
People think someone would have positive feeling for them when they see the person who greeting them with kindly smile.
>>> People think someone would have positive feelings for them when they see the person who greeting them with a kind smile.
Sometimes, People think someone would negative feeling for them when they see the person who don’t greet them because of their two-way thinking.
>>> Sometimes, people think someone would have negative feelings for them when they see the person who doesn’t greet them because of their two-way thinking.
In the later case, I have the experience that after the situation people do not talk with each other.
>>> In the later case, I have the experience where after that situation people do not talk with each other.
In this case, It’s very hard to get the better relationship with the effort of one person because of the influence of their thinking.
>>> In this case, It’s very hard to establish a good relationship with the effort of one person because of the influence of their thinking.
So, I think It’s important to greet the person who I saw first to get the good relationship and talk with each other friendly.
>>> So, I think it’s important to greet the person who I saw for the first to have a good relationship and talk friendly with each other.
>>> So, I think it’s important to greet the person who I saw for the first to have a good relationship and talk friendly with each other.
Thank you for reviewing :)
>>> correct
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