homework day2

Hello!! teacher. I'm paul. I'm submitting my homework. Today's question - Do you think our society is too dependent on technology like smartphones? Why or why not? I think our society is too rely on technology. These days, Many peole are using smartphone and computer. It makes our life convenient. For example, If i have a question, i can find adequate information by using the smartphone at all times. However, stat-of-the-art technologys have a side effect. Becacuse of using the device frequently, the time that faces each other decreases more and more. So I think the best solution is using devices moderately.

Hello Paul! Thank you so much for being so diligent in doing your homework. This is a very good composition, despite the grammar slips. You were able to express your thoughts well. You just need to take note of the verb tenses and your sentence structure. Keep up the good work!   Please check the corrections below.   Ciao!   ~Teacher Marie~   Hello!! teacher. >> Hello teacher!   I\'m paul. >> CORRECT! OR >> I\'m Paul. OR >> It\'s me, Paul.I\'m submitting my homework.>> CORRECT! OR >> Here\'s my homework. I think our society is too rely on technology. >> I think our society relies too much on technology.   These days, Many peole are using smartphone and computer. >> These days, many people are using their smartphones and computers.   It makes our life convenient. >> CORRECT! OR >> It makes our life more convenient.   For example, If i have a question, i can find adequate information by using the smartphone at all times. >> CORRECT! >> at all times -- anytime   However, stat-of-the-art technologys have a side effect. >> However, this state-of-the-art technology has a side effect.   Becacuse of using the device frequently, the time that faces each other decreases more and more. >> Because we use these devices frequently, our personal time with each other decreases. OR >> Because we use these devices frequently, we don\'t spend much time with other people anymore.   So I think the best solution is using devices moderately. >> So I think the best solution is to use these devices moderately.