(Homework)Describe your dream place to live. Why would you want to live there? What would you do?

2019-07-18 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

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I don\'t care about suroundings. I can live in anywhere which is silent or loud. It means that I can stay at the country or a city. I just dream of a \'detached house\' where contain a little garden, parking lot, upstairs rooms, and an alttic. The alttic is most important point for me to choose my dream house. In alttic, I will play a guitar or a piano and sing a song with my children. When night falls, We will watch the blue sky with the twingkle stars. It\'s fantastic! Anyway, it\'s nice to play in a little garden too. my future wife and children may like it more than me. I like too, but I don\'t like a dog. So, althought they say me to buy a dog, I will not approve their requirement. But, if my child really wants, I will buy unwillingly...:( It will be happy.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! Thanks for this homework. I appreciate it a lot! ^ ^ Nice thoughts! Keep it up!  ^^
-Teacher Jedah 

I don\'t care about suroundings.
>>I don\'t actually care about my surroundings.
I can live in anywhere which is silent or loud.
>>I can live anywhere, whether it\'s a noisy or quiet environment.
It means that I can stay at the country or a city.
>>It means that I can live either in the urban or rural area.
I just dream of a \'detached house\' where contain a little garden, parking lot, upstairs rooms, and an alttic.
>>I just dream of a \"detached house\" where it has a tiny garden, a parking lot, upstairs rooms and an attic.
The alttic is most important point for me to choose my dream house.
>>A house having an attic is the most important point for me.
In alttic, I will play a guitar or a piano and sing a song with my children.
>>In the attic, I will play a guitar or a piano and sing songs with my children.
When night falls, We will watch the blue sky with the twingkle stars.
>>When night falls, we will look at the night sky and the twinkling stars.
It\'s fantastic!
>>Correct
Anyway, it\'s nice to play in a little garden too. my future wife and children may like it more than me.
>>Also, it\'s nice to play in a little garden too. 
My future wife and children may like it more than me.
>>Correct
I like too, but I don\'t like a dog. 
>>I like it too, but I don\'t like to have a dog.
So, althought they say me to buy a dog, I will not approve their requirement.
>>So, even if they will ask me to buy a dog, I will not approve of their request.
But, if my child really wants, I will buy unwillingly...:(
>>Correct
It will be happy.
>>Correct

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