homework :Do online games teach children violence? Why or why not?
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Good evening, Roa!^^ Happy Monday!
Thank you for accomplishing your homework.
You are right. There are many violent games online, however, some kids/teenagers only resort to playing these when they feel unloved or neglected.
I think parents play an important role in guiding their kids about online games. ^_-
_T. Mayleen :)
online games teach children violence.
>>> Correct!
CAPITALIZATION: Online games teach children violence.
because many violent games in the online games.
>>> It because there are many violent games online.
and because all people almost is learn quickly from games.
>>> People quickly learn violence from these games.
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