HOMEWORK: Do you think it\'s disrespectful to argue with your elders?
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HOMEWORK(Claire)
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Hello Claire!
Good job on your writing as always. See you! ^^
~~Teacher Kate
First, many people especially Koreans have the stereotype that it is always rude behavior to argue with elders.
>>CORRECT!
But it is as long as only a stereotype.
>>But it is just a stereotype.
But in my opinion, it isn’t always a bad thing to argue with elders.
>>CORRECT!
For example, will it be a good thing to do to follow what criminals say because of the only reason that it is rude behavior to argue with elders?
>>For example, will it be a good thing to follow what criminals say only because it is rude behavior to argue with elders?
Of course, it’s the best thing to not argue with elders but sometimes we need to argue with elders to defend ourselves.
>>CORRECT!
Before manners, we come first.
>>CORRECT!
Sometimes there is a need to break the stereotype.
>>CORRECT!
Second, the argument is a natural situation.
>>Second, arguments are natural situations.
We need to be equal without being seized with a frame of our society that arguing with elder people is disrespectful behavior.
>>CORRECT!
If our opinions don’t fit, arguments can occur at any moment.
>>If our opinions don’t match, arguments can occur at any moment.
And it’s not the exception that we are facing with the elderly.
>>And it\'s not an exception when we face the elderly.
It is my final conclusion and opinion that arguing can express unfairness or uncomfortableness without stereotypes of age.
>>It is my final conclusion and opinion that arguing can express unfairness or discomfort without stereotypes of age.
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