Homework : Do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?

2018-03-07 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

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There are mixed opinions about recycling. So, we should be concerned about how to recycle our waste or how much we have to do. In this essay, I will talk about these opinions and explain my ones. First of all, some people insist that people can’t distinguish all kinds of the waste, but government can play the role of the recycling. So, some counties have been employing workers that should wipe streets and recycle waste. Secondly, other countries establish strict policies about waste. This is because it needs much money to recycle and has negative effects on our nature. For example, they impose people that throw waste onto streets and remove bins on the street for people to carry litters. However, It can make inconvenience as they keep strongly the rules. As a result, I think that people should recycle their waste and government provide facilities or things that help people to recycle like well-designed waste bins. Our society and nature will be better, If this effort has remained.

강사 첨삭

Hi Allen!

Good effort for tonight.

Keep it up.

I have introduced some new expressions below.

Please take time to review them.

~~ Teacher Sharon

There are mixed opinions about recycling.

>> Correct
So, we should be concerned about how to recycle our waste or how much we have to do.

>> So, we should be concerned about how to recycle our waste or how often we have to do it.
In this essay, I will talk about these opinions and explain my ones.

>> In this essay, I will talk about these opinions and explain my own.
First of all, some people insist that people can’t distinguish all kinds of the waste.

>> First of all, some people insist that people can’t distinguish all kinds of waste.
but government can play the role of the recycling.

>> The government can play a great role in recycling.
So, some counties have been employing workers that should wipe streets and recycle waste.

>> So, some countries have been employing workers who could sweep the streets and recycle waste.
Secondly, other countries establish strict policies about waste.

>> Correct
This is because it needs much money to recycle and has negative effects on our nature.

>> Correct
For example, they impose people that throw waste onto streets and remove bins on the street for people to carry litters.

>> For example, they penalize people who throw waste on the streets and remove bins for people to carry litter.
However, It can make inconvenience as they keep strongly the rules.

>> However, the strict implementation of these rules could prove inconvenient.
As a result, I think that people should recycle their waste.

>> Correct
and government provide facilities or things that help people to recycle like well-designed waste bins.

>> The government must also provide facilities or things that would help people to recycle like well-designed waste bins.
Our society and nature will be better, If this effort has remained.

>> Our society and nature will be better if such measures could be maintained.

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