Homework: Do you think people greet less now because of technology?
학생이 쓴 원문
I don\'t think greeting between close people get less due to technology. Because I think the greeting is off-line gesture, it doesn\'t effect greeting when we met friends or family.
However, it is different with stranger. For example, when I was childhood, we usually greet someone at elevator even we don\'t know each other. The reason of greeting is just we lived in same village. But thesedays, we usually watch our smartphone using earphone at the elevator without any attention to other person. This situation makes more sever individualism, and I feel sad about it.
강사 첨삭
Hi! I really enjoyed reading your answer. You made a thoughtful observation about how technology affects social interactions, especially with strangers. I agree with your point, smartphones can make people more focused on themselves, which reduces small but meaningful gestures like greetings. I like how you used a personal example from your childhood; it made your explanation clear and relatable. Keep reflecting on real-life experiences like this, it makes your writing thoughtful and engaging!
-Teacher Wela
I don\'t think greeting between close people get less due to technology.
>> I don’t think greetings between close people have decreased because of technology.
Because I think the greeting is off-line gesture, it doesn\'t effect greeting when we met friends or family.
>> Greetings are usually offline gestures, so meeting friends or family in person is not affected.
However, it is different with stranger.
>> However, the situation is different with strangers.
For example, when I was childhood, we usually greet someone at elevator even we don\'t know each other.
>> For example, when I was a child, we usually greeted people in the elevator, even if we didn’t know them.
The reason of greeting is just we lived in same village
>> The reason was simply that we lived in the same village.
But these days, we usually watch our smartphone using earphone at the elevator without any attention to other person.
>>These days, however, people usually watch their smartphones or listen to music with earphones in the elevator, without paying attention to others.
This situation makes more sever individualism, and I feel sad about it.
>> This situation encourages more extreme individualism, and it makes me feel sad.
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