HOMEWORK: Do you think women are better at giving advice than men?
학생이 쓴 원문
Some people think that women can be better at giving advice. However, in my opinion, there is no significant difference in providing advice between male and female. I once read the article saying women tend to value relationship and men tend to focus on actions, which sounds women have higher possibility to be good at empathizing and become good counselors. Nevertheless, I think that opinion only shows a simple tendency and cannot define all people\'s characteristics. Moreover, with respect to conversation, both approaches can have advantages. Depending on situations, people want to get different kinds of advice, like practical solutions or empathy. Thus, I believe sincere attitude to help is more important than which gender people are in becoming good adviser.
강사 첨삭
[이름],
You expressed your thoughts very well and presented a wonderfully balanced, mature argument! Great work there!
~ Trixia
CONTENT:
Some people think that women can be better at giving advice.
~ CORRECT.
However, in my opinion, there is no significant difference in providing advice between male and female.
~ However, in my opinion, there is no significant difference in providing advice between men and women.
I once read the article saying women tend to value relationship and men tend to focus on actions, which sounds women have higher possibility to be good at empathizing and become good counselors.
~ I once read an article saying that women tend to value relationships and men tend to focus on actions, which makes it sound like women have a higher probability of being good at empathizing and becoming good counselors.
Nevertheless, I think that opinion only shows a simple tendency and cannot define all people\'s characteristics.
~ CORRECT.
Moreover, with respect to conversation, both approaches can have advantages.
~ CORRECT.
Depending on situations, people want to get different kinds of advice, like practical solutions or empathy.
~ Depending on the situation, people look for different kinds of advice, like practical solutions or empathy.
Thus, I believe sincere attitude to help is more important than which gender people are in becoming good adviser.
~ Thus, I believe a sincere desire to help is more important than a person\'s gender when it comes to becoming a good advisor.
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