Homework : Do you think writing email has strengthened or weakened people’s writing skills?

2018-01-09 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

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There are different opinions about the effects of writing emails. I think that anyone can't deny both opinions. In this essay, I will talk about these arguments and explain my opinions. First of all, developing technology such as sending email makes the way of communication simple. We can use several ways of communication like SNS, SMS, and even e-mail. And then it takes only a few seconds to receive their messages. This is true that people can save time though using the technology related to communication. On the other hand, writing abilities have decreased as much as people using e-mail feel convenience. Because people usually send the only short text. It negatively affects their writing levels and most people feel difficult to write long sentences. In my opinion, although people’s writing skills have inevitably weakened though using email, We shouldn’t deny disadvantages and have to adapt this situation. However, our writing skills definitely are complemented by other supports.

강사 첨삭

Hi Allen!

I see that you have two classes with me now.

Along with your homework, I believe that you are taking your studies seriously.

Keep it up!

I\'ll see you later!

~~ Teacher Sharon

There are different opinions about the effects of writing emails.
>> There are different opinions on the effects of writing emails.
I think that anyone can\'t deny both opinions.

>> I think that no one can deny both opinions.
In this essay, I will talk about these arguments and explain my opinions.

>> Correct
First of all, developing technology such as sending email makes the way of communication simple.

>> Correct
We can use several ways of communication like SNS, SMS, and even e-mail.

>> Correct
And then it takes only a few seconds to receive their messages.

>> It takes only a few seconds to receive messages.
This is true that people can save time though using the technology related to communication.

>> It is true that people can save time though using technology related to communication.
On the other hand, writing abilities have decreased as much as people using e-mail feel convenience.

>> On the other hand, some people say that writing abilities have decreased as more people use email for convenience.
Because people usually send the only short text.

>> Through this method, people send only short messages.
It negatively affects their writing levels and most people feel difficult to write long sentences.

>> It negatively affects their writing levels and most people feel that it\'s difficult to write long sentences.
In my opinion, although people’s writing skills have inevitably weakened though using email, We shouldn’t deny disadvantages and have to adapt this situation.

>> In my opinion, although people’s writing skills have inevitably weakened though using email, we shouldn’t deny these disadvantages and we have to adapt to this situation.
However, our writing skills definitely are complemented by other supports.

>> However, our writing skills could still be improved through other supplementary materials or methods.

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