[Homework] Do you think you should pay to visit museums?

Hi Allen!

This is a great expression of your opinion.

I can tell that you really spent some time on your work.

I\'m looking forward to our class later.

~~ Teacher Sharon

There are different opinons on payment for museums.

>> There are different opinions on charging payment for museums.

Some people indicates that these museums don’t have to charge admission.

>> Some people state that these museums don’t have to charge for admission.

However the others argue that It is needed.

>> However, others argue that it is needed.

So this essay will dicuss about these opinions suggest my idea.
>>This essay will discuss the aforementioned opinions and I will also give my own idea.
First of all, admission of museums should be free because they can provide many advantages as public service.

>> First of all, admission in museums should be free because they can provide many advantages that can be considered as public service.

According to some researchs, Visiting to museums is helpful to learn about history and also establish a sense of art.

>> According to research, visiting museums is helpful in learning about history and also establishing a sense of art.

These positive effects lead that most museums should be available for anyone without any fee.
>> These positive effects lead to the conclusion that most museums should be available for anyone without a fee. 
On the other hand, the admission should be paid for some people who involved in these museum.

>> On the other hand, museum staff asserts that admission to museums should be charged.

They think that museums essentially need bugets to maintain and operate their facility.

>> They think that museums essentially need funds to maintain and operate their facilities.

Therefore my opinion is not different so far but public is also important.

>>Therefore, my opinion is not that different but the public is also important.

As a result, I suggest that museums would get limited fee to enter their building.

>> As a result, I suggest that museums can charge an adjusted fee for the people to enter the building.

If It does well, they can satisfy both visitors and people who involved in their institutions.

>> If the museum does well, they can satisfy both the visitors and the people who are involved in these institutions.