homework : essay

2020-09-23 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

학생이 쓴 원문

With the Corona virus going around, many students take online classes now. I think that online study is effective and convenient way to learn. As I live in the digital world, I am familiar with the online education system. It is cost-effective. For me, I went to school in the other city. So, I had to pay a lot of money include transportation and boarding expenses. But in this semester, I take classes from my home, so I have little expenditure. And I am not restricted by time and space if I take classes in online. It is comfortable for me. However, some students think that face-to-face classes are better than online classes. There are three reasons why they love them. First, students communicate more actively in face-to-face classes rather than online classes. They also focus very well in the classroom. Secondly, there are no internet server problems in off-line classes. Lastly, some classes are required to do experiments or practices. In this case, face-to-face classes are necessary.

강사 첨삭

Hi there [이름]~! Great day to you~! ^^ Thanks for completing your task despite of your busy schedule~! ^^ See you soon~! 
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
With the Corona virus going around, many students take online classes now. 
>>> CORRECT
I think that online study is effective and convenient way to learn. 
>>> CORRECT
As I live in the digital world, I am familiar with the online education system.
>>> CORRECT
 It is cost-effective.
>>> CORRECT
 For me, I went to school in the other city. 
>>> CORRECT
So, I had to pay a lot of money include transportation and boarding expenses.
>>> So, I had to pay a lot of money including transportation and boarding expenses.
But in this semester, I take classes from my home, so I have a little expenditure.
>>> CORRECT
 And I am not restricted by time and space if I take classes online.
>>> CORRECT
 It is comfortable for me.
>>> CORRECT
However, some students think that face-to-face classes are better than online classes. 
>>> CORRECT
There are three reasons why they love them.
>>> CORRECT
 First, students communicate more actively in face-to-face classes rather than online classes. 
>>> CORRECT
They also focus very well in the classroom. 
>>> CORRECT
Secondly, there are no internet server problems in off-line classes.
>>> CORRECT
 Lastly, some classes are required to do experiments or practices. 
>>> CORRECT
In this case, face-to-face classes are necessary.
>>> CORRECT

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