homework : essay

2020-09-25 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

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Many people start to concern with the environmental problems. Some of them says that the government should have the whole responsibility of cleaning up the pollution. They insist that the government should control the environmental pollution by governmental authorities and taxes. For example, the government can enact the laws or invest in public institutions which are responsible for environmental protection. However, I think that the private companies also have the responsibilities. They should pay for it. Many companies have produced products while polluting the nature environment for a long time. They ignored the problem because they were hurry to produce a great deal of output with a little effort. Those companies should reflect on their selfishness and restart. They have to develop a new system for reducing the pollution and participate in the campaigns.

강사 첨삭

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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Many people start to concern with the environmental problems. 
>>> Many people start concerning environmental problems. 
Some of them say that the government should have the whole responsibility of cleaning up the pollution.
>>> CORRECT
 They insist that the government should control the environmental pollution by governmental authorities and taxes. 
>>> CORRECT
For example, the government can enact the laws or invest in public institutions which are responsible for environmental protection.
>>> CORRECT
However, I think that the private companies also have responsibilities. 
>>> CORRECT
They should pay for it. 
>>> CORRECT
Many companies have produced products while polluting the environment for a long time.
>>> CORRECT
 They ignored the problem because they were hurry to produce a great deal of output with a little effort.
>>>  They ignored the problem because they were in a hurry to produce a great deal of output with a little effort.
Those companies should reflect on their selfishness and restart. 
>>> CORRECT
They have to develop a new system for reducing the pollution and participate in the campaigns.
>>> They have to develop a new system to reduce the pollution and participate in the campaigns.



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