homework : essay
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I think the joint - investigation regarding the death of the South Korean official should be made. Because, we can secure enough evidence and take a balanced investigation by cooperation. If each country investigate separately, they can fall into bias. This can be abused politically. Also, the people of both countries can support and trust the government. It prevents people from prejudice, conflict and hatred. Therefore, joint – investigation is necessary for the sake of friendly relations between the two countries.
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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I think the joint - investigation regarding the death of the South Korean official should be made.
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Because, we can secure enough evidence and take a balanced investigation by cooperation.
>>> CORRECT
If each country investigates separately, they can fall into bias.
>>> CORRECT
This can be abused politically.
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Also, the people of both countries can support and trust the government.
>>> CORRECT
It prevents people from prejudice, conflict and hatred.
>>> CORRECT
Therefore, joint-investigation is necessary for the sake of friendly relations between the two countries.
>>> CORRECT
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