homework : essay

2020-11-02 · 첨삭 강사 Gemma

학생이 쓴 원문

I think homeschooling can be a great chance for students to challenge themselves. The number of students who drop out of school or doing homeschooling are increasing. In the past, there was a prejudice that dropouts or homeschooling are failure in life. It was considered normal only to attend school. So, students couldn’t dropout the school easily, and they had a hard time by themselves. But nowadays, the perception of dropping out and homeschooling is improved a lot. Teachers and parents support their child’s choice to study at home. They think that students can learn something they want and find their own dream by homeschooling. Also, they can reflect themselves and become mature. However, I’m little bit worried about the students’ interpersonal relationship. In school, student can make friends and have a good relationship with them. But when they leave the school, they will be lonely. Therefore, families should support them a lot.

강사 첨삭

Hi there [이름]~! ^^ Good day to you! Thanks for doing your essay. I saw that you won\'t be with me today. You may be busy. Keep going. Good luck!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I think homeschooling can be a great chance for students to challenge themselves. 
>>> CORRECT
The number of students who drop out of school or doing homeschooling are increasing.
>>> CORRECT
In the past, there was a prejudice that dropouts or homeschooling are failure in life. 
>>> CORRECT
It was considered normal only to attend school. 
>>> CORRECT
So, students couldn’t dropout the school easily, and they had a hard time by themselves. 
>>> CORRECT
But nowadays, the perception of dropping out and homeschooling is improved a lot. 
>>> But nowadays, the perception of dropping out and homeschooling has improved a lot. 
Teachers and parents support their child’s choice to study at home. 
>>> CORRECT
They think that students can learn something they want and find their own dream by homeschooling. 
>>> CORRECT
Also, they can reflect themselves and become mature.
>>> CORRECT
However, I’m little bit worried about the students’ interpersonal relationship. 
>>> CORRECT
In school, student can make friends and have a good relationship with them. 
>>> CORRECT
But when they leave school, they will be lonely. 
>>> CORRECT
Therefore, families should support them a lot.
>>> CORRECT

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