homework : essay
학생이 쓴 원문
I don’t agree with that opinion. I think art can be education, too. Korean schools have few are classes. Korea focuses on theoretical subjects such as language and mathematics. It is very hard and boring. So, students are easily got tired. Korean students are just good at solving problems and memorizing the textbook. They are not creative and characteristic. Experts say that this is the biggest problem of Korean students.
Therefore, I insist that the art classes should be increased in all schools. Students have to experience various kinds of art, so they can develop sensibility and aesthetic sense. Also, they can reduce stress. Art has healing effects, too. Uniquely, I took a lot of art classes when I was in school. And It was very helpful for my entire teenage life.
Education is enough in Korea. So, we should be more artistic in the future.
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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I don’t agree with that opinion.
>>> CORRECT
I think art can be education, too.
>>> I think art can be educational too.
Korean schools have few are classes.
>>> A few schools in Korea conduct classes.
Korea focuses on theoretical subjects such as language and mathematics.
>>> CORRECT
It is very hard and boring.
>>> CORRECT
So, students are easily got tired.
>>> So, students get easily tired.
Korean students are just good at solving problems and memorizing the textbook.
>>> CORRECT
They are not creative and characteristic.
>>> CORRECT
Experts say that this is the biggest problem of Korean students.
>>> CORRECT
Therefore, I insist that art classes should be increased in all schools.
>>> CORRECT
Students have to experience various kinds of art, so they can develop sensibility and aesthetic sense.
>>> CORRECT
Also, they can reduce stress.
>>> CORRECT
Art has healing effects, too.
>>> CORRECT
Uniquely, I took a lot of art classes when I was in school.
>>> CORRECT
And it was very helpful for my entire teenage life.
>>> CORRECT
Education is enough in Korea.
>>> CORRECT
Education is enough in Korea.
>>> CORRECT
So, we should be more artistic in the future.
>>> CORRECT
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