homework : essay
학생이 쓴 원문
I think I am a perfectionist and this personality trait makes other people tired and exhausted. When I do something with others, I set a high goal and force it to my teammates. If we fail, I disappointed and chafe. This caused troubles a lot so I wanted to fix it.
강사 첨삭
Is this true? Being a perfectionist is also good in a way. :) But, I think, it is also good to loosen up a bit.
I think I am a perfectionist and this personality trait makes other people tired and exhausted.
>> Correct.
When I do something with others, I set a high goal and force it to my teammates.
>> When I do something with others, I set a high goal and force it on my teammates.
If we fail, I disappointed and chafe.
>> If we fail, I get disappointed and chafe.
This caused troubles a lot so I wanted to fix it.
>> This caused trouble a lot. That is why I wanted to fix it.
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