Homework Essay

1) My future goal I'm working in Sustainability Management Center of Korea Productivity Center, which advises companies regard sustainability in their management. Companies should regard not only their economic efficiency but also their social responsibility, such as volunteering, donation, or keeping environment. I belive that this actvities make world more peaceful and heal disorders of our capitalism. Capitalism itself dosen't guarantee happiness of people. Human desire about development needs to be limited. Sustainability will set limit to our excessive desires. I will devote to spread this concept to all of Korea.

Hi Ikyun! I'm really glad you made it, and thanks for sharing.. Anyway, here are my corrections:   I'm working in Sustainability Management Center of Korea Productivity Center, which advises companies regarding sustainability in their management. Companies should regard not only their economic efficiency but also their social responsibility, such as volunteering, donation, or keeping environment. I belive that these activities will make the world more peaceful and will heal disorders of our capitalism. Capitalism itself doesn't guarantee happiness of people. Human desire about development needs to be limited. Sustainability will set limit to our excessive desires. I will devote myself in spreading this concept to Korea.   - Be carefull with your spellings, too   ^_^ Take care