Homework(family trip)

2019-01-16 · 첨삭 강사 May

학생이 쓴 원문

Teacher, Today, I am busy preparing to go to the vacation forest~. It has hiking trails and walking trails, and children can experience the forest and nature firsthand. Have a nice lunch~ see you again^^ There are many kinds of travel in this world. Among them, traveling with family gives us memories and happiness wherever we go. When I was young, I went on an East trip with my family for the first time. Although it was a long and difficult trip at the time, it still exists in my memory. Whenever I think of that memory, it makes me happy with a precious album. I go on a trip sometimes to make many memories with my family album. A few years ago, I have been to U.S.A. when I was in America, I happened to talk with my American friend. At that time, my first son is one year old so I wonder if he will remember this family trip. The friend replied to me that the memories and feelings of being together would be remembered.

강사 첨삭

Good afternoon [이름]! You will surely treasure the moments when you were in the USA.

Have a safe trip and enjoy it! ^^

~~May~~

There are many kinds of travel in this world. Among them, traveling with family gives us memories and happiness wherever we go. When I was young, I went on an East trip with my family for the first time.

>> CORRECT

Although it was a long and difficult trip at the time, it still exists in my memory.

>> Although it was a long and hassle trip, I can still remember it.

Whenever I think of that memory, it makes me happy with a precious album. 

I go on a trip sometimes to make many memories with my family album.

A few years ago, I have been to U.S.A.

when I was in America, I happened to talk with my American friend.

>> CORRECT

At that time, my first son is one year old so I wonder if he will remember this family trip.

>> At that time, my first son WAS one year old so I wonder if he could still remember this family trip.

The friend replied to me that the memories and feelings of being together would be remembered.

>> My friend replied and said that the memories and feelings of being together would be remembered.

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