HOMEWORK FOR 03.04
학생이 쓴 원문
I worte my Self Introduction below.
After you check and correct that, I will memorize during weekends and then speech in front of you on Monday.
I would appreciate it if you check my accent, pronunciation, intonation, etc.
Have a good day. :D
First of all, thank you for giving this opportunity to introduce myself to you.
My name is [Name]-Young [이름]g and I\'m 37 years old.
After graduating from university, I joined DNACT company in 2012 and I worked there for 9 years.
DNACT is a sports brand company, and I worked in the sales department.
I was responsible for the \'Retail Area Manager\' and also \'Sales MD\' too.
It\'s not common to experience two positions so I can say I am [Name] understanding of Retail processes.
And I have high loyalty of company.
Because I didn\'t give up even if the compnay has a difficult situations like dbankupt.
If I get a job in your company, I will show you my loyalty to the company and passion for my work.
Thank you.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]! I think this one is a good introduction. You are able to speak direct to the point. I can\'t wait to practice it with you! See you! Take care! - Faith-
I worte my Self Introduction below.>> I wrote my Self Introduction below.
After you check and correct that, I will memorize during weekends and then speech in front of you on Monday.
>> After you check and correct that, I will memorize it during the weekend and then practice speaking in front of you on Monday.
I would appreciate it if you check my accent, pronunciation, intonation, etc.
>> CORRECT
Have a good day. :D
>> CORRECT
First of all, thank you for giving this opportunity to introduce myself to you.
After you check and correct that, I will memorize during weekends and then speech in front of you on Monday.
>> After you check and correct that, I will memorize it during the weekend and then practice speaking in front of you on Monday.
I would appreciate it if you check my accent, pronunciation, intonation, etc.
>> CORRECT
Have a good day. :D
>> CORRECT
First of all, thank you for giving this opportunity to introduce myself to you.
>> CORRECT
My name is [Name]-Young [이름]g and I\'m 37 years old.
My name is [Name]-Young [이름]g and I\'m 37 years old.
>> CORRECT
After graduating from university, I joined DNACT company in 2012 and I worked there for 9 years.
After graduating from university, I joined DNACT company in 2012 and I worked there for 9 years.
>> CORRECT
DNACT is a sports brand company, and I worked in the sales department.
>> DNACT is a sports company, and I worked in the sales department.
I was responsible for the \'Retail Area Manager\' and also \'Sales MD\' too.
I was responsible for the \'Retail Area Manager\' and also \'Sales MD\' too.
>> I worked as a \'Retail Area Manager\' and \'Sales MD\' too.
It\'s not common to experience two positions so I can say I am [Name] understanding of Retail processes.
It\'s not common to experience two positions so I can say I am [Name] understanding of Retail processes.
>> It\'s not common to experience two positions at the same company, so I can say I have excellent understanding of retail processes.
And I have high loyalty of company.
And I have high loyalty of company.
>> And, I always have my loyalty to a company that I work for.
Because I didn\'t give up even if the compnay has a difficult situations like dbankupt.
>> I can say that confidently because in my previous company, I stayed there during its difficult situations, even if it was on the brink of bankruptcy.
If I get a job in your company, I will show you my loyalty to the company and passion for my work.
>> If given a chance to work in your company, I will show my loyalty and passion for my work.
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