Homework for 4/16
학생이 쓴 원문
Who is more complicated gender: men or women?
Why? Explain your answer.
I think women is more complicated gender in social, educatioal facet.
Many people say that women is likely to think everything very complicated compared to men. It is often described as that women seldom express their opinion about their emotion, and let other people guess their feelings. Sometimes this points turns to be a good reason for women to be refuted. However these characters are more often originated from the condition women are situated at. Women are raised to care and consider other people's feelings carefully, and sometimes some harsh lessons are taught to girls saying that "You are a lady. Act like a lady" or "You should be perfect in every details, as an women and mom. To cut to the details, this complexity comes from the way that girls are taught. It forms their characters as a gender identity, and many girls are likely to be seized in complexity and contradiction of gender.
강사 첨삭
HELLO JUNE,
Thank you for sharing your opinion on this matter.
Have a nice day ahead!
Teacher Sophia
Here are your corrections:
I think women is more complicated gender in social, educatioal facet.
>> I think, women are the most complicated gender in social and educational facet.
Many people say that women is likely to think everything very complicated compared to men.
Many people say that women is likely to think everything very complicated compared to men.
>> Many people believe that women think more complicated compares to men.
It is often described as that women seldom express their opinion about their emotion, and let other people guess their feelings.
>> Women seldom express their true emotions and let other people guess their true feelings.
Sometimes this points turns to be a good reason for women to be refuted.
>> Sometimes this point is one of the reasons why women are refuted.
However these characters are more often originated from the condition women are situated at.
>> However this characteristic explains the condition of women.
Women are raised to care and consider other people\'s feelings carefully, and sometimes some harsh lessons are taught to girls saying that \"You are a lady.
>> Women naturally consider other people\'s emotions or feelings and sometimes, the society focuses on the woman\'s characteristics in public.
Act like a lady\" or \"You should be perfect in every details, as an women and mom.
>> The society pushes women to act as a lady.
To cut to the details, this complexity comes from the way that girls are taught.
>> To cut is short, it comes from the way the girls were taught and trained.
It forms their characters as a gender identity, and many girls are likely to be seized in complexity and contradiction of gender.
>> This is the reason why the female gender is the more complicated than the male gender.
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