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2012-08-22 · 첨삭 강사 karen

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When people move to another country, some of them decide to follow the customs of the new country. Others prefer to keep their own customs. Compare these two choices. Which one do you prefer? Support your answer with specific details I prefer to follow the customs of the new country if I move to it. There's also a proverb, "When in Rome, do what Romans do". For example, I have actually tried to experience the foreign custom when I visited the house of my father's freind in Japan and it was great experience.If I try their customs, it would show my repect to natives in the country and it will help me understand their culture. But that doesn't mean that I abandon my own tradition. I am so proud of my country and culture, so I will keep ultimate tradition but try to follow the new rule in the line that not happens the trade off situation. Karen! Always thank you for teaching me and giving me the confidence whenever in our class time! See you soon!^^Take care~

강사 첨삭

Two thumbs up! 

Good job for finding time to make your homework. (= It\'s always a pleasure knowing that I can be a part of your growth. I\'m looking forward to talking to you again someday. Hopefully, our paths will meet once again in the future. 

-t.Karen =^.^=

When people move to another country, some of them decide to follow the customs of the new country. Others prefer to keep their own customs. Compare these two choices. Which one do you prefer? Support your answer with specific details

I prefer to follow the customs of the new country if I move to it.

>> I prefer to follow the customs of the new country if I move there. 

>> ** It would be clearer to use the pronoun \"there\". 

There\'s also a proverb, \"When in Rome, do what Romans do\".

>> Correct! ^^ 

For example, I have actually tried to experience the foreign custom when I visited the house of my father\'s freind in Japan and it was great experience.

>> For example, I have actually tried to experience a foreign custom when I visited the house of my father\'s friend in Japan and it was a great experience. 

>> ** Use the article \"a\" instead  because you are referring to a random custom that only you know about. We usually use \"the\" if we are talking about something that we both know about. 

>> ** Be careful with your spelling especially when typing: \"Friend\". 

If I try their customs, it would show my repect to natives in the country and it will help me understand their culture.

>>  If I try their customs, it would show my respect to the natives in the country and it will help me understand their culture.

>> ** Don\'t forget to place the article \"the\" because you are talking about a specific group of people.  

>> ** Be careful with your spelling especially when typing: \"Friend\". 

But that doesn\'t mean that I abandon my own tradition.

>> Correct! ^^ 

I am so proud of my country and culture, so I will keep ultimate tradition but try to follow the new rule in the line that not happens the trade off situation.

>>  I am so proud of my country and culture, so I will keep our ultimate tradition but still try to follow the new rule without crossing the line which causes a trade off situation. 

>> ** Revise your sentence to make it easier to understand. 

>> ** Use the pronoun \"Our\" to identify whose tradition and culture you are talking about. 

Karen! Always thank you for teaching me and giving me the confidence whenever in our class time!

>> Karen! As always thank you for teaching me and giving me the confidence in our class each time! 

See you soon!^^

>> Correct! ^^ 

Take care~

>> Correct! ^^ 

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