homework for August 9th

I think standard of success differ from individual to individual, but a main point of the standard is if her/his mind is satisfied of her/his life. Some people want to be rich people, and others want to be a good mother or father. For the former, it is the success to earn much of money, but it is the success to make happy family for the latter. No one knows what I will be satisfied except myself. However, everyone knows if someone try to do for other people’s satisfaction, she/he will never be satisfied her/his life. Because of that, to be success, we have to try to know what I really want to do. What I really like to do? What is my talent which other people don’t have? Am I happy now? If we constantly ask myself, someday we will realize what we really want to do and then we can be success on our life.

Hi there, Sarah! Thank you for doing your homework. You did a remarkable job in expressing your thoughts about this topic. I\'m impressed! Well done! I would like you to be consistent with the subject and pronouns that you use in your sentences. Coherency is important here. Please check my corrections below. Ciao! ~Teacher Marie~ I think standard of success differ from individual to individual, but a main point of the standard is if her/his mind is satisfied of her/his life.>> I think the standard of success differs for every individual, but the main point is our satisfaction.Some people want to be rich people, and others want to be a good mother or father. >> Some people want to be rich while others just want to be a good parent. For the former, it is the success to earn much of money, but it is the success to make happy family for the latter. >> For the former, success is earning a lot of money, but having a happy family signifies success for the latter.No one knows what I will be satisfied except myself. >> No one knows about my satisfaction except for myself. However, everyone knows if someone try to do for other people’s satisfaction, she/he will never be satisfied her/his life. >> However, everyone knows that if we try to satisfy other people, then we will never be satisfied with our life. Because of that, to be success, we have to try to know what I really want to do. >> For that reason, to be successful, we have to know what we really want to do. What I really like to do? >> What do I really like to do? What is my talent which other people don’t have? >> What talent do I have that other people don\'t have? Am I happy now? >> CORRECT! If we constantly ask myself, someday we will realize what we really want to do and then we can be success on our life. >> If we constantly ask ourselves these, someday we will realize what we really want to do and then we can be successful in our lives.