homework for the day:)

2013-07-24 · 첨삭 강사 Risa

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HOMEWORK FOR THE DAY : Do you think anyone can become a celebrity? If you ask me of the upper question, my answer is "Sure, of course." Because Everyone is the same human who can be a celebrity. Though my answer is "Sure, of course.", it is a really difficult for everyone to be a celebrity. IN korea, many student dream of becoming a celebrity these days. But they have to have many previous conditions and an innate talent. For example, a person who want to be a celebrity has not only to try his best but also to make a opportunity to be a celebrity. In addition, there is a necessary inborn talent which is good voice, good looking, and so on. We certainly have to know a celebrity, who had a hard time and did his best.

강사 첨삭

Sir Charles, thank you so much for sharing your thoughts. :)

I totally agree with everything you said.

It is not enough for one to dream.

Talent, effort and hard work are needed.

 

See ya,

T.Risa

 

HOMEWORK FOR THE DAY : Do you think anyone can become a celebrity?

If you ask me of the upper question, my answer is \"Sure, of course.\"
>> If you ask me of the question above, my answer is \"Sure, of course.\"

Because Everyone is the same human who can be a celebrity.
>> Because every human has the opportunity to become a celebrity.

Though my answer is \"Sure, of course.\", it is a really difficult for everyone to be a celebrity.

>> Though my answer is \"Sure, of course\", it is really difficult for everyone to be a celebrity.

IN korea, many student dream of becoming a celebrity these days.
>> In Korea, many students dream of becoming a celebrity these days.

But they have to have many previous conditions and an innate talent.
>> But they have to have a talent and undergo a lot of trainings.

For example, a person who want to be a celebrity has not only to try his best but also to make a opportunity to be a celebrity.

>> For example, a person who wants to be a celebrity should not only do his or her best but also has to look for opportunities to become a celebrity.

In addition, there is a necessary inborn talent which is good voice, good looking, and so on.
>> In addition, the aspiring person should have an innate talent, good looks, and the like.

We certainly have to know a celebrity, who had a hard time and did his best.

>> We certainly should know that to become a celebrity, one should do his or hest best and work hard.

/P

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