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2012-03-17 · 첨삭 강사 karen

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A. No.Because, lies can make in to two group. One is white lie and one is big lie. white lie is a lie but, it is a very good lie. (for example)There are one grandmother and her daughter and her grandchild. One day, grandmother gave her grandchild a food what she make.But the grandchild dosen't like that food.Then the phone rang.It was grandmother. The grandmother ask, "Did you eat food that I make for you?" the grandchild said, "Yes, I eat it aready.It was very delicious.Thanks grandma!!" and grandmother anser, "All right.I'm happy to herd that you ate food that I make.Well,good bye,my dear.".So grandchild hang off.The grandchild's mother ask, "Why do you tell grandma a lie?" than grandchild anser "Because,I want to gave grandma some happiness.I don't want to gave her hartborken." So,And I think we have to becareful to not to tell a big lie, but sometime,we can use white lie for not gave others hartbroken.

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Hi [이름]! Thank you for doing your homework! I really enjoyed your homework. It's very creative ^^ I agree with your answer, I do think that humans cannot live peacefully without lies. Anyway, please continue doing a good job and I will call you again really soon. Take care and have a very very nice weekend! (^___^)

~t.Karen >^.^<

No. Because, lies can make in to two group.

>> ** Combine your sentence together and consider sentence revision.

>> No I don't agree because there are two different kinds of lies.

One is white lie and one is big lie.

>> ** Consider sentence revision.

>> One is a white lie and the other is a big lie.

 white lie is a lie but, it is a very good lie.

>> ** Don't forget your article 'A'.

>> ** Capitalize the first letter of your sentence.

>>  A white lie is a lie but, it is a very good lie.

 (for example)There are one grandmother and her daughter and her grandchild.

>> ** Use 'and' before the last word you are joining together.

>> There is one grandmother, her daughter and her grandchild.

 One day, grandmother gave her grandchild a food what she make.

>> ** Don't forget your article 'the'.

>> ** Consider sentence revision.

>> One day, the grandmother gave her grandchild the food that she made.

But the grandchild dosen\'t like that food.

>> ** Use 'didn't' as it is a story in the past.

>> But the grandchild didn't like that food.

Then the phone rang.

>> Correct! ^^

It was grandmother.

>> ** Don't forget your article 'the'.

>> It was the grandmother.

 The grandmother ask, \"Did you eat food that I make for you?\"

>> ** Turn your verbs into past tense because the story is in the past.

>> ** Use a punctuation mark to end your sentence.

>> The grandmother asked, \"Did you eat food that I made for you?\".

 the grandchild said, \"Yes, I eat it aready.It was very delicious.Thanks

 grandma!!\"

>> Correct! ^^

and grandmother anser, \"All right.I\'m happy to herd that you ate

 food that I make.Well,good bye,my dear.\".

>> ** Don't forget your article 'the'.

>> and the grandmother anser, \"All right.I\'m happy to hear that you ate

 food that I made.Well,good bye,my dear.\".

So grandchild hang off.

>> ** Don't forget your article 'the'.

>> ** Consider sentence revision.

>> So the grandchild hung up.

The grandchild\'s mother ask, \"Why do you tell grandma a lie?\" than grandchild

 anser \"Because,I want to gave grandma some happiness.I don\'t want to gave

 her hartborken.\"

>> ** Consider sentence revision.

>> ** Be careful with your spelling: 'answer' and 'then'.

>> The grandchild\'s mother ask, \"Why did you tell grandma a lie?\" then the grandchild

 anwsered \"Because,I want to make grandma happy.I don\'t want to give

 her a broken heart'.

 So,And I think we have to becareful to not to tell a big lie, but sometime,we

 can use white lie for not gave others hartbroken.

>> ** Consider sentence revision.

>> So I think we have to becareful to not to tell a big lie, but sometimes,we

 can use white lies so others won't be heartbroken.

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