HOMEWORK FOR TODAY
학생이 쓴 원문
HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:
Composition: Do you agree or disagree to the following statement? Television is the leading cause of violence in today's society.
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Yes, I definitely agree to this statement.
We can see many violent scenes on screens and TV in these days at any time if we would like to.
They affect the sensitive youth's thought and behaviour.
It means that they would lead the youth to the violent environment.
Because the youth are willling to follow the actors' performances even if they
are not good. It's none of their business.
They just like to act like an actor themselves.
So, We need to regulate the producing some TV programs and films also in consideration of the youth and children, I think.
강사 첨삭
Good afternoon Sir [이름]!
It\'s good to see your name in the composition board. I appreciate the ideas that you have shared today. Have a great day!
~KELLY~
HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:Composition: Do you agree or disagree to the following statement? Television is the leading cause of violence in today\'s society.--------Yes, I definitely agree to this statement.
>> Correct!!!We can see many violent scenes on screens and TV in these days at any time if we would like to.>> We can see many TV violence these days any time if we would like to.
They affect the sensitive youth\'s thought and behaviour.
>> Correct!!!It means that they would lead the youth to the violent environment.
>> It means that they would lead the youth to a violent environment.Because the youth are willling to follow the actors\' performances even if they are not good. It\'s none of their business.>> Correct!!!
They just like to act like an actor themselves.
>> Correct!!!So, We need to regulate the producing some TV programs and films also in consideration of the youth and children, I think.
>> I think we need to regulate the production of some TV programs and films in consideration to children and the youth.
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