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2016-12-26 · 첨삭 강사 Charlie

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Money should be spent on basic. Because money is more important then computer basic. When we have money we can buy computer. And when we have many money I think that people is really smart because my mom said when we go to really good college we can go to good company and workand get many money. When computer should be basic I willthink it is not good to have computer basic . Teacher I choose my article it is about the 12/23 ARTICLE 1 IT IS ABOUT THE CHRISTMAS

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]!


I think you misunderstood the question in the composition topic. It was asking whether you agree with:

A: The government should spend money on developing computer technology

OR

B: The government should spend money on the basic needs (basic needs like food, water, clothes, shelter)


Try to look for the meanings of the words \"basic\" and \"basic needs\". In English, do not use words that you do not understand because it would make your sentence confusing and senseless.


The correction made was worded to answer the composition topic.



All good things,

==Teacher Charlie==




Money should be spent on basic.
Because money is more important then computer basic.
When we have money we can buy computer.
And when we have many money I think that people is really smart because my mom said
when we go to really good college we can go to good company and workand get many money. When computer should be basic I willthink it is not good to have computer basic.

>> I agree with the opinion that governments should spend more money on  basic needs rather than developing computer technology because the basic human needs are more important than computers. We need the basic needs to live and survive. On the other hand, we don\'t need the use of computers to live or survive. That is why I agree that the government should spend more money on basic needs.


Teacher I choose my article it is about the 12/23 ARTICLE 1 IT IS ABOUT THE CHRISTMAS

>> Teacher, I would like to discuss the first article dated 12/23/2016  and entitled \"Light Fight: Attorney Sues neighbor Over Home Christmas Display\".

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