Homework for whensday
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Essay: "When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success." Do you agree or disagree with the quotation above? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position.
A) Every men who tries his best doesn't succeed always, but every men who succeeded did a hard work. It means luck affects to success. And It also means if you work hard, luck increases also. For example, The swimming player who didn't work hard can't participate in the 2012 London olympic. But the player who participated in the olympic by working hard can get a lucky chance in the game. There is no chance for the lazy man. So, it is important for the man who wants success to work hard. So, my position to that quotation is little different. Not that luck doesn't affect to the success, but it increases as you work hard and has an effect on success.
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[이름],
It seems you\'ve really put some thoughts on the quotation. What a good way to put things. You were able to explain well. Good job!
T. Sheela
Essay: \"When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success.\" Do you agree or disagree with the quotation above? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position.A) Every men who tries his best doesn\'t succeed always, but every men who succeeded did a hard work.
>>Every man who tries his best doesn\'t succeed always but every man who succeeded did a lot of hardwork.
It means luck affects to success.
>>I means luck affects success.
And It also means if you work hard, luck increases also.
>>Correct!
For example, The swimming player who didn\'t work hard can\'t participate in the 2012 London olympic.
>>For example, a swimming player who didn\'t work hard can\'t participate in the 2012 London Olympics.
But the player who participated in the olympic by working hard can get a lucky chance in the game.
>>But the player who participated in the Olympics by working hard can get lucky in the game.
There is no chance for the lazy man. \\
>>There is no chance for a lazy man.
So, it is important for the man who wants success to work hard.
>>So it is important for a man to work hard to succeed.
So, my position to that quotation is little different.
>>So my position to that quotation is a little different.
Not that luck doesn\'t affect to the success, but it increases as you work hard and has an effect on success.
>>Not that luck doesn\'t affect success, but it increases as you work hard and has an effect on success.
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