Homework(friendship)

2019-01-23 · 첨삭 강사 May

학생이 쓴 원문

Teacher~ There are many kinds of definitions of a friend in this world, but there are common aspects regardless of the country. To understand, care and encourage each other for each other(to pray) can be seen in true friendships. Years ago, I lived next door to a new American friend. As time went by, we became good friends through mutual consideration. I invited him to my house for dinner, and I was also invited to his house for dinner. We both ate new foods, but we had a good time for dinner and conversation. On our traditional holiday, I took him to my hometown and he had a great time to encounter Korean culture, delicious food and to feel the sentiments of Korea. After that, I happened to go to the friend house in America in my life. He also taught me a lot about America. When I left there, it was snowing a lot outside the day. Under such circumstances, he gladly pulled the heavy carrier with me to the airport. I always thank my true friend and cheer him up as a friend~.

강사 첨삭

Good morning [이름]! I\'m glad that you met an American friend. I think that you are really friendly.

It\'s good that you have at least one foreign friend, you got to know something about their country

and you were also able to introduce your country. Keep it up!

By the way, check out some corrections that I made below each of your sentences. ^^

~~May~~

There are many kinds of definitions of a friend in this world, but there are common aspects regardless of the country.

>> There are many definitions of the word \"friend\", but there are common aspects to consider regardless of the country.

To understand, care and encourage each other for each other(to pray) can be seen in true friendships. 

>> To understand, to care, to encourage each other, and to pray for each other, are some ways to see how true a friendship is.
Years ago, I lived next door to a new American friend.

>> CORRECT

As time went by, we became good friends through mutual consideration.

>> As time went by, we became good friends because we have similarities or some things in common.

I invited him to my house for dinner, and I was also invited to his house for dinner.

>> CORRECT

or >> I invited him to my house for dinner, and he also invited me to his house for dinner.

We both ate new foods, but we had a good time for dinner and conversation.

>> We both ate new foods, and we had a good time while having our conversation at a dinner time.

On our traditional holiday, I took him to my hometown and he had a great time to encounter Korean culture, delicious food and to feel the sentiments of Korea. 

>> On our traditional holiday, I took him to my hometown and he had a great time to experience the Korean culture, ate delicious foods and to felt the sentiments of Korea. 
After that, I happened to go to the friend house in America in my life.

>> After that, I happened to go to a friend\'s house in America.

He also taught me a lot about America.

>> CORRECT

When I left there, it was snowing a lot outside the day.

>> When I left there, it was snowing a lot throughout the day.

Under such circumstances, he gladly pulled the heavy carrier with me to the airport.

I always thank my true friend and cheer him up as a friend~.

>> CORRECT

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