Homework from the lesson 10282021

2021-10-30 · 첨삭 강사 Debbie

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Some people think that facing challenges improves a person. Do you agree or disagree? I cannot but agree to the opinion that people gets improced by facing challenges. I believe people see a certain situation as a challenge when they are not sure if they are able to overcome it or not. That is, by successfully completing a task, one can prove that they are capable of doing it again. If you do not face a challenge and choose to rather avoid the situation, it only shows the inability or the lack of will. Even if you have enough ability, it would hold no meaning if you keep avoiding the chance to prove it. However, I also think that there are times when facing a rough situation doesn\'t mean the person is improving. As a person who had numerous challenges to face for some years, experiencing failures one after another may also hold bad influence to a person\'s improvement. Therefore, facing challenges is beneficial, but only when they are not entirely impossible.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]! You outdid yourself today with regards to your grammar. Keep up the good job!

- Debbie

Some people think that facing challenges improves a person. Do you agree or disagree?

I cannot but agree to the opinion that people gets improced by facing challenges.
>> I cannot but agree with the opinion that people improve by facing challenges.

I believe people see a certain situation as a challenge when they are not sure if they are able to overcome it or not.
>> This is a good sentence.

That is, by successfully completing a task, one can prove that they are capable of doing it again.
>> By completing a task, one can prove that he is capable of doing it again.

If you do not face a challenge and choose to rather avoid the situation, it only shows the inability or the lack of will.
>> This is a good sentence.

Even if you have enough ability, it would hold no meaning if you keep avoiding the chance to prove it.
>> This is a good sentence.

However, I also think that there are times when facing a rough situation doesn\'t mean the person is improving.
>> This is a good sentence.

As a person who had numerous challenges to face for some years, experiencing failures one after another may also hold bad influence to a person\'s improvement.
>> For a person who has faced numerous challenges for some years, experiencing failures one after another may hinder his improvement.

Therefore, facing challenges is beneficial, but only when they are not entirely impossible.
>> This is a good sentence.

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