Homework from the lesson 11012021
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Homework: What do you think of athletes making so much money? Is it a good thing or a bad thing?
My opinion on a person\'s earning is mostly based on the effort and time the person invested to make it. Therefore I think athletes deserve earning a lot of money, more so if they invested time and energy to acheive something great.
Though I do not think other jobs need less effort or investment to be successful, in my opinion, success as an athlete is perhaps more dependent on the physical effort than other kinds of career.
Also, famous athletes get their achievement mostly because of their supreme performance. I see no problem in them making more money. It could be a problem if they are making the same amount of money after they stopped performing successfully. However, as long as their investment is constant, I think they can make as much money as they are paid.
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My opinion on a person\'s earning is mostly based on the effort and time the person invested to make it.
>> My opinion on a person\'s earnings is mostly based on the effort and time the person invested to make them.
Also, famous athletes get their achievement mostly because of their supreme performance.
Therefore I think athletes deserve earning a lot of money, more so if they invested time and energy to acheive something great.
>> Therefore, I think athletes deserve to earn a lot of money, all the more so if they invest time and energy to achieve something great.
Though I do not think other jobs need less effort or investment to be successful, in my opinion, success as an athlete is perhaps more dependent on the physical effort than other kinds of career.
>> Though I do not think other jobs need less effort or investment to be successful, in my opinion, success as an athlete is perhaps more dependent on physical effort than in other kinds of careers.
Also, famous athletes get their achievement mostly because of their supreme performance.
>> Moreover, famous athletes get their achievement mostly because of their supreme performance.
I see no problem in them making more money.
>> This is a good sentence.
It could be a problem if they are making the same amount of money after they stopped performing successfully.
>> It could be a problem if they are still making the same amount of money even if they are performing poorly.
However, as long as their investment is constant, I think they can make as much money as they are paid.
>> However, as long as their investment is constant, I think they can make as much money as they can.
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