Homework from the lesson 11042021
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Nov 04 2021
Homework: Can a person be happy and well-adjusted without any friends?
When it comes to a person’s happiness, I cannot say that no friends means no happiness, because, in my opinion, happiness is defined differently for each individual. Therefore, there is a possibility that an individual is happy without anyone around him/her.
However, I do not think a person can be well-rounded without any friends around. It is because I think a personality is defined through countless adjustings and adaptations, and especially when they are done through communicating with others. Being happy, I think, has nothing to do with the degree of being well-adjusted. For a person to be well-adjusted, he/she needs opportunities to observe other’s reaction during interactions.
As children, we were taught to think in others’ shoes, to objectively assess ourselves. While I agree to the lesson, I also think that daily, it is through other people’s reactions that we learn the appropriate ways
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Homework: Can a person be happy and well-adjusted without any friends?
When it comes to a person’s happiness, I cannot say that no friends means no happiness, because, in my opinion, happiness is defined differently for each individual.
>> When it comes to a person’s happiness, I cannot say that having no friends means no happiness because, in my opinion, happiness is defined differently for each individual.
Therefore, there is a possibility that an individual is happy without anyone around him/her.
>> This is a good sentence.
However, I do not think a person can be well-rounded without any friends around.
>> However, I do not think a person can be well-adjusted without any friends around.
It is because I think a personality is defined through countless adjustings and adaptations, and especially when they are done through communicating with others.
>> It is because I think a personality is defined through countless adjustments and adaptations, and especially when they communicate with others.
Being happy, I think, has nothing to do with the degree of being well-adjusted.
>> This is a good sentence.
For a person to be well-adjusted, he/she needs opportunities to observe other’s reaction during interactions.
>> For a person to be well-adjusted, he/she needs opportunities to observe others\' reactions during interactions.
As children, we were taught to think in others’ shoes, to objectively assess ourselves.
>> As children, we were taught to put ourselves in others’ shoes to objectively assess ourselves.
While I agree to the lesson, I also think that daily, it is through other people’s reactions that we learn the appropriate ways
>> While I agree with the lesson, I also think that it is through other people’s reactions that we learn the appropriate ways to form relationships.
Therefore, I strongly disagree to the idea of one being able to be well-adjusted individual without having any friends.
>> Therefore, I strongly disagree with the idea of one being able to be a well-adjusted individual without having any friends.
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