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2020-07-09 · 첨삭 강사 Lucy

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As a child, Lego make me be over the moon. Especially I like to make Lego of medieval castles. And than I use to use Lego to play a game of attacking a castle alone and defending a castle alone. And now to make a food for my family makes me happy and I like to make something which is convenient stuff for my friends. Therefore I love to see their reactions and it makes me. Finally these ake me to raise my self-esteem.

강사 첨삭

Thank you An!
~Lucy

As a child, Lego make me be over the moon.
>>As a child, Lego makes me be over the moon.
Especially I like to make Lego of medieval castles.
>>Especially, I like to make Lego of medieval castles.
And than I use to use Lego to play a game of attacking a castle alone and defending a castle alone.
>>And then, I use to use Lego to play a game of attacking a castle alone and defending a castle alone.
And now to make a food for my family makes me happy and I like to make something which is convenient stuff for my friends.
>>CORRECT!
Therefore I love to see their reactions and it makes me.
>>Therefore, I love to see their reactions and it makes me happy.
Finally these ake me to raise my self-esteem.
>>Finally, these make me develop my self-esteem.

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