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To be honest, I don\'t like to go on the rides in an amusement park.
I feel scared when I go on the rides.
But I think I went on the mostly all rides in Korea\'s an amusement park.
One day, when I went to the amusement park, I was forced in to go on the rides by my friends or ex girlfriend.
They hurt my pride and I had no choice but to go on the rides.
So I don\'t like fast rides and to frighten me are rides.
Therefore my favorite rides are the merry-go-round and Bumper cars.
And I like to see the parade in an amusement park.
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Thank you An!
~Lucy
To be honest, I don\'t like to go on the rides in an amusement park.
>>CORRECT!
I feel scared when I go on the rides.
I feel scared when I go on the rides.
>>CORRECT!
But I think I went on the mostly all rides in Korea\'s an amusement park.
>>But I think I tried most of all rides in Korea\'s amusement parks.
One day, when I went to the amusement park, I was forced in to go on the rides by my friends or ex girlfriend.
>>CORRECT!
They hurt my pride and I had no choice but to go on the rides.>>CORRECT!
So I don\'t like fast rides and to frighten me are rides.>>So, I don\'t like fast rides and rides frighten me.
Therefore my favorite rides are the merry-go-round and Bumper cars.
>>Therefore, my favorite rides are the merry-go-round and Bumper cars.
And I like to see the parade in an amusement park.
>>CORRECT!
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