Homework : How can teachers stop "bullying" at school?

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It’s so serious problems in my country that several students bully others at school.

>> Students bullying others in school is a serious problem in my country.
In this essay, I will talk about fatal problems and explain my opinion.

>> Correct
Firstly, some bad students hit other students because they just don’t like him.

>> Firstly, some bad students hit other students because they just don’t like them.
The number of suicide form junior generation have increased for a long time because of this activities.

>> The number of suicide cases among the younger generation has increased over time because of these activities.
Although teachers try to stop these activities, I’m sure that they can’t solve these problems.

>> Correct
To solve these issues, many people have to involve and concern.

>> To solve these issues, many people have to get involved and express their concern.
Teachers and parents should teach their students and children about respecting to other people.

>> Teachers and parents should teach their students and children about respecting other people.
Professionals have to concern about how to react and prepare a guidance when these issues generate.

>> Professionals have to consider how to react and make sure guidance is available when these issues arise.
Governments establish several policies that weak students can be protected.

>> Governments must establish several policies so that weak students can be protected.
Honestly, I don’t sure that this solution would work well at school.

>> Honestly, I am not sure that these solutions would work well at school.
However, we should constantly concern about that.

>> However, we should never stop being concerned.
Because there are no perfect solutions anywhere to keep all children’ safe.

>> This is because there are no perfect solutions anywhere to keep all children safe.