Homework : How can we make ourselves eat healthier food?

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There are many approaches to taking healthier food.

>> There are many approaches to eating healthier food.
In this essay, I will introduce popular methods and talk about my opinion.

>> Correct
First of all, people who want to be healthy should control chance to eat high calorie food especially in night.

>> First of all, people who want to be healthy should limit eating food with high calories especially at night.
 For example, in Korea, several workers usually have appointments at night.

>> Correct
At this moment, they can\'t avoid to take high calorie and instant food that have negative effects on health.

>> During these times, they can\'t avoid to eat fast food with high calories and these have negative effects on their health.
Therefore people should control the number of making appointments.

>> Therefore, people should control the frequency of their appointments to eat out.
Secondly, people can avail useful services to improve their health.

>> Secondly, people can avail of useful services to improve their health.
In these days, it is easy to see various type of services which improve our condition.

>> These days, it is easy to see various types of services which improve our condition.
For instance, there are so many gyms which provide the service through cheap price.

>> For instance, there are so many gyms which provide the service at a cheap price.
Other example is the service delivering healthy breakfast in every morning.

>> Another example is the service of delivering healthy breakfast every morning.
These are useful to keep our health.

>> These are useful to maintain our health.
However, these approaches are not original solutions.

>> However, these approaches are not one-time solutions.
I think that people should constantly keep these efforts that stay healthy.

>> I think that people should constantly sustain these efforts to stay healthy.