Homework : How do you think computers have changed the world?

2017-12-29 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

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I believe that the Technology has been developping human life. In the future, our life will be changed by the technology as much as we can\'t image. In this essay, I will talk out these effects and our future life style that I think. First of all, people would not need post mans anymore in the future. Because leading companies would improve the delivery process. For example, only high tech drones and machines might deliver most products after a few years. Secondly, people would not need to drive a car. In the future, most cars should be controled by A.I because the cars that human drives would engender even more accidents. As a result, I think that the technology would promotes our life although there are some problems that we should solve.

강사 첨삭

Hi Allen!

Are you ready for our mock test later on?^^

Thank you for taking the time to express your ideas through this work.

Keep working hard.

~~ Teacher Sharon

I believe that the Technology has been developping human life.

>> I believe that this product of technology has developed the way of living of humans.

In the future, our life will be changed by the technology as much as we can\'t image.

>> In the future, I believe that our lives will be changed by technology more than we have ever imagined.

In this essay, I will talk out these effects and our future life style that I think.

>> In this essay, I will talk about the possible effects of computers on our future.
First of all, people would not need post mans anymore in the future.

>> First of all, the world won\'t need postmen in the future anymore.
Because leading companies would improve the delivery process.

>> I believe leading companies would modernize the delivery process of our communications.
For example, only high tech drones and machines might deliver most products after a few years.

>> Correct
Secondly, people would not need to drive a car.

>> Correct
In the future, most cars should be controled by A.I because the cars that human drives would engender even more accidents.

>> In the future, most cars might be controled by A.I because the cars that humans drive would engender even more accidents.
As a result, I think that the technology would promotes our life although there are some problems that we should solve.

>> As a result, I think that technology would promote a better way of life although there are some problems that we should still solve.

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