Homework : How do you think your country will change in the future?

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~~ Teacher Sharon

I’m sure that my country and our life will be changed in the future.

>> I’m sure that my country and our lives will change in the future.
In this essay, I will discuss reasons for future changes and talk about my opinions.

>> Correct
First of all, There are several reasons why our life will be changed

>> First of all, there are several reasons why our lives will change.
We can predict our change in the future from the past.

>> We can predict the changes in our future from the past.
Korea has been enhanced with economy and technology over the last few decade.

>> Korea has enhanced its economy and technology over the last few decades.
Therefore, Korea would maintain developments for a long time basing on achievements last time.

>>  Therefore, Korea would maintain its development for a long time basing on achievements in the past.
Secondly, I will explain our life in the future that I thought.

>> Secondly, I will explain our life in the future as I imagine it.
Even though, calling can transfer only voices and videos when we contact someone these days, We would see someone’s hologram at that situation in the future.

>> Even though, calls can currently transfer only voice and video messages when we contact someone these days, we would be able to see someone’s hologram in these situations in the future.
Vehicles and machines will automatically do a ton of works instead of working by humans.

>> Vehicles and machines will automatically do a ton of work which would be otherwise done by humans.
Like this, many things will be changed in the future.

>> Many things will change in the future such as the examples I have given.
As a result, people have to find our role in the future.

>> As a result, people have to find their role in the future.
This is because people would be dominated by machine if they don’t prepare in the rapidly changing circumstance

>>  This is because people would be dominated by machines if the former won\'t adapt to the rapidly changing circumstances.