(Homework)How do you usually spend Christmas?
학생이 쓴 원문
My Christmas is very special day and i spend a lot of money to buy gifts...
This reason is that my son believes Santa clause is existence.
The result of this that i want to protect his childlike and this time not last forever..
In addition, before dinner, my family are celebrating Christmas evening with prepared some cake.
While celebrating Christmas, we talk to each other about our happening of year
My Christmas time so tiny that i don\'t think it is the most special day for my life.... but i love other\'s birthday to celebrating.
Thank you for listening to my tiny Christmas time!. see you tomorrow~
강사 첨삭
[이름],
Thank you for sharing! Please review the corrections. Remember that clear sentence structure and correct word choice make your ideas easier to follow.
~ Trixia
CONTENT:
1. My Christmas is very special day and i spend a lot of money to buy gifts...
-- My Christmas is a very special day, and I spend a lot of money to buy gifts.
2. This reason is that my son believes Santa clause is existence.
-- The reason is that my son believes Santa Claus exists.
3. The result of this that i want to protect his childlike and this time not last forever..
-- As a result, I want to protect his childlike innocence because this time will not last forever.
4. In addition, before dinner, my family are celebrating Christmas evening with prepared some cake.
-- In addition, before dinner, my family celebrates Christmas Eve with some prepared cake.
5. While celebrating Christmas, we talk to each other about our happening of year
-- While celebrating Christmas, we talk to each other about the events of the year.
6. My Christmas time so tiny that i don\'t think it is the most special day for my life.... but i love other\'s birthday to celebrating.
-- My Christmas time is so simple that I don’t think it is the most special day of my life, but I love celebrating other people’s birthdays.
7. Thank you for listening to my tiny Christmas time!. see you tomorrow~
-- Thank you for listening to my simple Christmas story! See you tomorrow~
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