Homework : How does a generation gap affect interaction between two people?

2018-01-16 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

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There is no doubt that a generation gap between older and younger people affects their interaction. There are not only positive effects but also negative effects. I will talk about these effects and argue my opinions. Firstly, I will explain the positive effects about that. Older generations have many experiences that younger people don’t have yet. That would cause positive results at any workplace. Secondly, it negatively influences their interaction. They have different experiences about society, culture, even and environment. That would negatively result in their relationship between them. However, it should be solved anyway. As a result, people have to gain this positive one and break negative effects. If these efforts are maintained for a long time, it might make our life improved.

강사 첨삭

Hi Allen!

You have rested for a while but your skills are still up to par.

Keep up the good work!

We have a goal to achieve.^^

~~Teacher Sharon

There is no doubt that a generation gap between older and younger people affects their interaction.

>> Correct
There are not only positive effects but also negative effects.

>> Correct
I will talk about these effects and argue my opinions.

>>  I will talk about these effects and present my arguments.
Firstly, I will explain the positive effects about that.

>> Firstly, I will explain the positive effects of a generation gap.
Older generations have many experiences that younger people don’t have yet.

>> People from the older generations have many experiences that younger people don’t have yet.
That would cause positive results at any workplace.

>> Correct
Secondly, it negatively influences their interaction.

>> Correct
 hey have different experiences about society, culture, even and environment.

>> Correct
 hat would negatively result in their relationship between them.

>> That would affect their relationship in a negative way.
However, it should be solved anyway.

>>Correct
As a result, people have to gain this positive one and break negative effects.

>> In conclusion, people have to focus on the positive effects of the generation gap.
 f these efforts are maintained for a long time, it might make our life improved.

>>  If these efforts are maintained for a long time, it might even improve all our lives.

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