Homework) How does social media affect people’s ideas about fitness and body image?
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In my opinion, social media makes us more and more unhealthy.
Because they need thinner body for women without muscles.
They are also frames that a woman has a muscle body, is not feminine.
I think It\'s not just problem with social media.
TV shows, magazines and even bus stop advertise also talk about beauty of thin bodies.
I hope that everyone thinks about real health.
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In my opinion, social media makes us more and more unhealthy.
>>> correct
Because they need thinner body for women without muscles.
Because they need thinner body for women without muscles.
>>> Because for women, they need thinner bodies even without muscles.
They are also frames that a woman has a muscle body, is not feminine.
>>> They are also muscular body frames for women, which is not feminine.
I think It\'s not just problem with social media.
I think It\'s not just problem with social media.
>>> I think it\'s not just a problem with social media.
TV shows, magazines and even bus stop advertise also talk about beauty of thin bodies.
TV shows, magazines and even bus stop advertise also talk about beauty of thin bodies.
>>> TV shows, magazines and even bus stop advertisements also talk about beauty standards of having thin bodies.
I hope that everyone thinks about real health.
I hope that everyone thinks about real health.
>>> correct
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