Homework : I think our generation is better than these days childhood,
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The first, lack of socially
old generation’s are big family, they are has many brother and sister live in small house.
during that time(grew up together) they are know how interact with family and people(family are teach them how to get manner, how to get attitude e.t.c)
But now a days family member are decreased, so they(child)are didn’t enough chance to learn.
The second, they to busy to learn something, even very young child.
The generation is going through changes, big family are changed to nuclear family
Through that many people are want to get a good job and high position is one of life object.
To get a good position they have to learn and study hard even very young child.
In my opinion, childhood is very important period to life so I think we should give a free time and chance to do child are want.
Your right, these days to many good thing for child but, I think enough play and enough communicate with child is one of best thing
therefore my generation is better than now
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Hi [이름]!^^
A nice afternoon to you.
Thank you as well for sending your assignment. I also think that our generation is better that today\'s generation.
I remember when I was a kid, me, my cousins, neighbors and my brothers played on the streets.
We played traditional games but now, kids only play their devices.
See you in class.
~~T. Andrea
Homework : I think our generation is better than these days childhood,
>>I think our generation is way better than these days generation.
The first, lack of socially>> First reason, they lack social skills.
old generation’s are big family, they are has many brother and sister live in small house.
old generation’s are big family, they are has many brother and sister live in small house.
>>Old generations are big family, they have many brothers and sisters and they live in a small house.
during that time(grew up together) they are know how interact with family and people(family are teach them how to get manner, how to get attitude e.t.c)
during that time(grew up together) they are know how interact with family and people(family are teach them how to get manner, how to get attitude e.t.c)
>> During that time, they grew up together. they know how to interact with their family and with the people around them. Family members taught them to have good manners and right attitude.
But now a days family member are decreased, so they(child)are didn’t enough chance to learn.
>> But nowadays, numbers of a family member is decreasing.
But now a days family member are decreased, so they(child)are didn’t enough chance to learn.
>> But nowadays, numbers of a family member is decreasing.
The second, they to busy to learn something, even very young child.
>>The second thing is, they are too busy studying at a very young age.
The generation is going through changes, big family are changed to nuclear family
>>This generation is going through a lot of changes from having an extended family to nuclear family.
>>This generation is going through a lot of changes from having an extended family to nuclear family.
Through that many people are want to get a good job and high position is one of life object.
>> Because of that, many people want to get a good job and a higher position which is their main goal in life.
>> Because of that, many people want to get a good job and a higher position which is their main goal in life.
To get a good position they have to learn and study hard even very young child.
>> In order for them to be in a high position, they have to start studying hard even at very young age.
>> In order for them to be in a high position, they have to start studying hard even at very young age.
In my opinion, childhood is very important period to life so I think we should give a free time and chance to do child are want.
>> In my own opinion, childhood is a very important period in one\'s life so they should have the chance to do what they want as a child.
Your right, these days to many good thing for child but, I think enough play and enough communicate with child is one of best thing
>> You\'re right, these days there are too many material things that we can give to our child, but I think having enough time to play and to communicate to our child is the best thing.
therefore my generation is better than now.
>>Therefore, my generation is better than today\'s generation .
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