Homework : In your country, do men or women have the main responsibility for cooking?

2017-12-22 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

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Korean people have the different opinions about the cooking responsibility. In some family, only women play the role for cooking. On the other hand, in other families, father and mother of each family cook together. And the balance, how much men or women are involved, has transformed for a long time. In this essay, I will explain about the change on the responsibility for cooking between past and present. In the past, most mothers are only the main food maker in their family. No one who consists of the family might help the housework. Sometimes it causes that mothers feel tired and lonely and it negatively affects their atmosphere. At the present, this role has been expanded from only mothers to whole of family members. Because our culture and environment have been changed and the number of double income families has increased. So, the rights of men and women should be same in their family and society. I also agree that all members of family play their one's role for housework.

강사 첨삭

Hi Allen!

Christmas is coming!

Take some time to rest.

I\'ll be giving you some interesting topics to write about.

See you in class!

~~ Teacher Sharon

Korean people have the different opinions about the cooking responsibility.

>> Korean people have different opinions about cooking responsibilities in the house.
 In some family, only women play the role for cooking.

>> In some families, only women have the role of a cook.
On the other hand, in other families, father and mother of each family cook together.

>> On the other hand, in other families, the father and  the mother of each family cook together.
 And the balance, how much men or women are involved, has transformed for a long time.

>> Even the balance between men and women have been transformed for a long time.
In this essay, I will explain about the change on the responsibility for cooking between past and present.

>> In this essay, I will explain about some changes in the responsibility for cooking from the past to the present.
In the past, most mothers are only the main food maker in their family.

>> In the past, mothers are the only ones who prepare food in their family.
No one who consists of the family might help the housework.

>> Other members of the family didn\'t help with housework.
 Sometimes it causes that mothers feel tired and lonely and it negatively affects their atmosphere.

>> This caused mothers to feel tired and lonely and it negatively affected their emotions.
At the present, this role has been expanded from only mothers to whole of family members.

>> At present, the role of homemaker has been extended to all the members of the family.
 Because our culture and environment have been changed and the number of double income families has increased.

>> This is because our culture and environment have changed and the number of double income families has increased.
So, the rights of men and women should be same in their family and society.

>> So, the rights of men and women should be equal in their families and in society.
I also agree that all members of family play their one\'s role for housework.

>> I also agree with the fact that all members of the family must do their part in doing housework.

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