Homework Jan.6th. 2022.

2022-01-06 · 첨삭 강사 Roanne

학생이 쓴 원문

Writing Task: Do you think it is more important to make a lot of money or to enjoy your job? >> If I enjoy my work, the ratio of getting succeeded and making huge money is high, in the end. I mean enjoying my job equals earning a lot of money. But it is possible only when what you do(enjoy) is something that people really want to do or to have, whether it\'s a product or a service. It is often said that money is the mixed blessing. But I don\'t see that. The more money I have, the more free time I would have, which means, I can do whatever I want with money. A REAL FREEDOM!!!!!

강사 첨삭

Hello, U [이름]~

Wow! I\'m amazed by your thoughts about this. Well, what you said is also true. Being financially stable makes all things better and easy.

Thank you for sharing your thoughts about this!

~T. Roanne ^_^

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1. If I enjoy my work, the ratio of getting succeeded and making huge money is high, in the end.
>> Correct!

2.I mean enjoying my job equals earning a lot of money.

>> I mean enjoying my job is equal to earning a lot of money.

3. But it is possible only when what you do(enjoy) is something that people really want to do or to have, whether it\'s a product or a service.
>> But it is possible only when what you do enjoy something that people really want to do or to have, whether it\'s a product or a service.

4. It is often said that money is the mixed blessing. But I don\'t see that.

>> It is often said that money is the mixed blessing, but I don\'t see that.

5. The more money I have, the more free time I would have, which means, I can do whatever I want with money. A REAL FREEDOM!!!!!

>> The more money I have, the more free time I would have, which means, I can do whatever I want with my money.

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