Homework_Jan 7

2020-01-08 · 첨삭 강사 Sheila

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Homework: Writing Task: What the advantages of learning English? Make a short essay about this. The reason why I have learned English at first was to feel an interest in English expressions, pronunciation and its well-organized structure. By learning English, I can build up how to think differently using English. In addition, I got my job thanks to English. I started my job as an overseas sales manager and had many chances to trip aboard. It was good experience.

강사 첨삭

Hello there [이름]! I noticed your deep interests in learning English. 

Until the next one! 
See you in class! ^_^

~Teacher Sheila



The reason why I have learned English at first was to feel an interest in English expressions, pronunciation and its well-organized structure. 
>>CORRECT
OR>>The reason why I learned English at first was because I was interested in English expressions, pronunciation and its well-organized structure.

By learning English, I can build up how to think differently using English.
>>CORRECT

In addition, I got my job thanks to English. 
>>CORRECT
OR>>In addition, I got my job because of English.

I started my job as an overseas sales manager and had many chances to trip aboard. 
>>I started my job as an overseas sales manager and had many chances to go on a trip abroad.
OR>>I started my job as an overseas sales manager so I had many chances to visit places abroad.

It was good experience.
>>It was a good experience.

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