homework(Money can't buy happiness)

Hello [이름],

I want you to assess yourself and set up your goals, these goals are ownership or your learnings. These could motivate you achieve the goals you want in life. Speaking the English could be difficult at times but I know you can go it!!!!

Please check the corrections that I\'ve made so that you\'ll not commit the same mistakes.

T. Jeny

when I was young. I thought that money isn\'t important.

>>When I was young I thought money wasn\'t important.
 but after I have been grown, I think about it differntly.

>>But as I grew up, I think about it differently.
 the suitable money is needed. when we live, we have to wear, eat. and we need a house. all about that need money.

>>It is true that money is needed to live, to buy clothes to wear, food to eat and a house to live in.
 after I was retired from my 1st job, my husbands also was retired from his 1st job. so we didnt\' have money. we were so hard.

>>After me and husband quit our 1st jobs we had a hard time because we didn\'t have any money.
 sometimes we cried. so after that time, I dont\'t say that money cant\' buy happiness. 
 >>Sometimes, we cry so at that time money can buy happiness.
but I dont\' agree about that money is the most important.

>>But I don\'t agree that money is the most important thing.
 we need proper money not enough money.
>>correct
teacher today I wrote a litte, as time goes I will write more and more

>>Teacher, I just wrote a little and as time goes by I will write more.