Homework (my opinion about the security of the internet)

2019-06-18 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

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i don\'t think the security of the internet is enough to keep personal information. But in the other hand, sometimes it annoys me to have to pass a number of security process. So i need a adequate system that has a simple process and strictable as the private matters.

강사 첨삭

Hello!^^

Thank you for sending your homework.

Cheers!

Jean

i don\'t think the security of the internet is enough to keep personal information.

>> The way I see it, the Internet security these days isn\'t enough to keep our personal information safe.

But in the other hand, sometimes it annoys me to have to pass a number of security process.

>> On the other hand, it sometimes annoys me to have to pass a number of security processes.

So i need a adequate system that has a simple process and strictable as the private matters.

>> For this reason, I need an adequate system that has a simple process but is strict when it comes to my private information.

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